Thank you, madam. I asked for the corrections, then wilted in shame when they were proferred. LOL
I shall take your criticism and grow. :)
Not criticism: suggestions. I don’t think any writer can reach his or her potential without a (okay ...) critical reader to say, “That adjective is weak: you can find a better one,” or “Are you sure that’s the exact verb you want?” or “This structure isn’t perfectly clear ... maybe if you broke it up and put this before that?”