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THE RAID: New Fiction from the War On Domestic Terrorism
www.sit-rep.com ^ | February 24, 2002 | Travis McGee

Posted on 02/26/2002 12:59:26 PM PST by Travis McGee

THE RAID

Fifteen year old Danny Edmonds was at his desk hunched over his computer keyboard clicking and typing furiously when his father came into his bedroom.

"Danny, do you know what time it is?"

"Uh, hi Dad, let's see, zero one hundred hours."

"Affirmative. Time for lights out son."

"But Dad, it's Saturday night!"

"So what's the war tonight?"

"Stalingrad."

"Which side are you?"

"I'm Russian this time."

"So what time zone is Field Marshal Von Paulus in? Maybe it's not one am in his bunker."

"Actually, his bio claims he's an Army major at Fort Campbell, so it would be midnight his time. And I'm kicking his butt clear back to the Ukraine."

"One more hour then, until two am, that's it. Tell the Field Marshal that General Zhukov's father ordered him to go to bed by then."

"Oh Dad, give me a break, he doesn't know I'm a kid." Danny's voice cracked, half way between boyhood and manliness.

"So you're whipping an active duty Army major in tactics?"

"Strategy Dad, strategy. It's corps level warfare."

"Right. Pardon me. And you still want to enlist in the Marines in three years?"

"Two Dad, two years."

"You know I won't sign for you at seventeen. Three years and you'll be on your own, free to make your own mistakes."

"Dad, I'll still be an officer, but a mustang officer! The greatest Marine officers are mustangs, prior enlisted."

It was an ongoing contest of wills between them. Burgess Edmonds could get Danny an appointment to Annapolis or West Point with one or two phone calls, but at fifteen Danny was determined to enlist in the Marines "ASAP" and get into the action as a "mud Marine" in the war.

Danny's room told the story. Where other fifteen year old boys had posters on their walls of rock groups and basketball stars, Danny had seemingly every Marine recruiting poster ever made. He had a camouflage poncho liner for a bed spread, he wore Marine combat boots to school to toughen his feet, and sitting at his desk he was wearing bright red USMC sweats, with the gold "globe and anchor" on the front and the Marine mascot bulldog on the back.

Danny was only fifteen, and Burgess had no complaints about him, not really. Danny was carrying a 3.9 GPA at Saint Paul's while lettering in wrestling and lacrosse and would have his choice of colleges, his father just hoped that his son would come around and see the benefits of accepting an appointment to a service academy after high school instead of enlisting. Danny was afraid the war would be over before he could get into it if he waited four more years: Burgess Edmonds did not share that belief, or any eagerness for his only son to experience combat. Anyway, he knew better than to push the issue. Danny and 21 year old Valerie were his "second family", and this time he was not going to blow it like he had the first time around. Maybe he'd mellowed, or maybe he'd just learned not to push them too hard.

"Okay Danny, whenever and however you do get your commission, you'll be the greatest officer the Marines ever had. Two am, all right bud?"

"All right Dad."

Burgess Edmonds turned to the hallway before Danny could see the tears welling up in his eyes. Then he slipped down the hall to Valerie's room, Valerie who was spending the weekend down from college, his little girl Valerie who had so quickly become a grown woman. Her door was slightly open, so he looked in and watched her sleeping under her quilted comforter, her golden hair spilled across her face and pillow. Where had his little girl gone, the little girl he had tucked in among teddie bears what seemed like only last week?

He went back downstairs. His wife Glennis, his second wife, was already long asleep in their bedroom at the other end of the second floor hallway from the kids' rooms.

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George Hummel was in the shotgun seat of the lead vehicle in the "Special Training Unit" raiding convoy, a black Chevy Suburban SUV with black tinted windows. It was parked on the shoulder of a dead end county service road under a covering of oak trees a mile from the Edmonds' driveway. Next to him in the driver's seat was STU "Gold Team" leader Tim Jaeger, the ex SEAL officer. Behind them in the back of the truck six more STU team members were sitting on the carpeted cargo deck: the seats had been removed for the operation to give them more room and allow faster exiting. Nearly all of them had prior service overseas with military specops units: the stripped out Suburban was just a "low flying helo" taking them to their latest battle zone as far as they were concerned. They were all wearing black tactical gear, with black kevlar helmets, black balaclava face masks, black gloves, black boots, even black Heckler and Koch MP-5 submachineguns.

Three more black Chevy Suburbans were lined up behind them. Tonight the STU Gold Team was the lead element and was taking down the house, the Blue Team was providing the snipers, the recon team, and the perimeter security. STU team on-site commander Bob Beaufort in the trailing Suburban was not masked or helmeted and was remaining at the bottom of the driveway, he would "badge" any local law enforcement which might arrive unexpectedly with his fake FBI credentials. Nothing on the STU team tonight would connect them with the BATF. This was the first time in his long career that Beaufort had carried FBI creds, the irony was delicious after years of being the subject of FBI jokes and put downs.

They all sat silent as death, watching the subdued lighting of the various screens in the front between the leaders, straining to hear their radio earphones which were turned down to a barely audible hiss. The snipers and the recon team had gone out hours before the raiding party had arrived at the forward staging area, dropped off by the STU's phoney "VEPCO" Virginia electric power van, which was now hidden nearby serving as a commo relay and electronic support unit. The "VEPCO" van was already monitoring the house's telephones and electrical usage, and would cut the phones and the ADT alarm system off just before the raid. Unknown to the Edmonds, two of their cell phones were now remotely turned on, providing the STU with audio listening devices paid for and placed in position by the Edmonds themselves.

The two man sniper teams and the recon team carried advanced 3rd generation night vision rifle scopes, thermal imagers, electronic "big ears", and "field detectors". If the Edmonds had infrared or microwave or other alarm systems on their property, then recon team "Romeo" would find and neutralize them before the raiding convoy arrived. The sniper teams with their night scopes and thermal imagers were in position to cover the flanks of the Edmonds 100 acre property, as well as the rear of the house towards the bluffs and the river.

The radio crackled in Hummel's ear, all thirty STU team men heard the report at the same time. "Gold leader, Romeo, all clear, condition zebra zebra, hush puppy."

Zebra zebra was a STU brevity code slang for "z's", meaning a sleeping house. The BATF and other federal law enforcement special response teams preferred to raid in the early hours when people were most deeply asleep. This was safest for everyone, providing the maximum shock for their "speed, surprise, and violence of action". This caused people to quit before they even had the first idea of resisting.

"Hush puppy" meant that the recon team had taken care of the Edmonds' dogs with sound suppressed weapons....

Gold Team leader Jaeger then checked his sniper teams, code named "Daniel Boone" and "Davy Crockett".

"Delta Bravo, Gold leader, sitrep."

"Gold leader, Delta Bravo ready."

"Gold leader, Delta Charlie ready."

"Gold Two ready?"

"Ready" came from the Suburban behind Hummel and Jaeger. Blue Leader and Blue Two reported in immediately after that.

Gold Leader Tim Jaeger flipped his helmet mounted night vision goggles down over his eyes. All four vehicles' engines were turned on. Jaeger hit the gas and all four blacked out vehicles ran up the service road to the county road in tight formation, fast but silent with their oversized custom mufflers. They'd all studied aerial photos of the Edmonds estate taken earlier that day from the newly acquired STU helicopter, they knew exactly where the snipers and the recon team were, they knew exactly where to park and jump out, they knew the locations of the doors and windows and who was assigned to each.

It was 2:45 am, and the STU team was conducting its first "real world" operation. They were primed, cocked, and coursing with adrenaline and testosterone. Payback for the Baltimore Massacre, and the Reston Virginia ambush of the FBI team, and the assassination of Senator Rodman and Sanderson was starting in one minute. They had all been briefed that Burgess Edmonds was the leader and financial kingpin of a shadowy right wing terrorist organization loosely hidden behind the cover of a rural hunting club in southeastern Virginia, an organization responsible for the past weeks' acts of domestic terrorism. And they all believed it: all except for Hummel in the lead Suburban, and Wally Malone, the founder of the Special Training Unit of the BATF, who was up overhead in the helicopter.

The Rest of the Story


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To: Howie
Actually, he's taken while leaning over his teed up golf ball on the 5th hole, getting ready to drive.

So it hits him right in the bald spot. "Instant Watermelon salad".

61 posted on 02/27/2002 12:03:26 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: xm177e2
Yeah, that's awkward useage. Only Rodman is a senator, Sanderson is the Va. Commonwealth's Attorney, but I didn't want to type all that.

In context, the reader and the waiting STU members all know who they are, so I should just say "Rodman and Sanderson" and leave out the titles.

62 posted on 02/27/2002 12:06:09 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: GeronL
Don't worry, that chapter is only about 2% of the book! It gives the flavor, but very little of the plot away.

If I do self publishing and sell through Amazon and B&N, Xlibris looks pretty good. But I am still pushing for conventional pubishing and distributing for now.

The deep split in American perceptions about the "war on domestic terrorism" is one of the major themes in the book. Check what I wrote in reply 38. Just imagine how the lamestream media would love to have "right wing gun fanatics" as villains! They would accept every govt announcement at face value, since the "enemy" would be one they already hate.

63 posted on 02/27/2002 12:14:10 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Ken H
Done!
64 posted on 02/27/2002 12:14:58 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: sneakypete
Of course, hopefully one from a major publishing house, if not, then one from "Joe's Cut-rate Online Self Publishing".
65 posted on 02/27/2002 12:17:51 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Robert_Paulson2
Thought you might like my take on the dark side of secret police operations in the near future.
66 posted on 02/27/2002 12:23:21 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Victoria Delsoul
I certainly hope you get a chance to read it by summer.
67 posted on 02/27/2002 12:31:25 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: NoCurrentFreeperByThatName
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68 posted on 02/27/2002 12:55:21 AM PST by NoCurrentFreeperByThatName
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To: Jeff Head; Travis McGee; GEC
In one word : WOW.

Having been a minor collaborator, I understand what effort goes into creating the level of detail and visual imagery in this excerpt of your book.

Bravo Travis. And thanks for the Bump, Jeff !

69 posted on 02/27/2002 3:32:22 AM PST by Dukie
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To: Travis Mc Gee
Having been a minor colloaboator on another work...

sheesh ! ....My phaseology inadvertently makes me appear to be claim jumping !!!

70 posted on 02/27/2002 3:38:51 AM PST by Dukie
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To: Travis McGee
Outstanding work. I can't wait to read the finished product.
71 posted on 02/27/2002 4:10:01 AM PST by NoCurrentFreeperByThatName
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To: Travis McGee
I enjoyed your writing, but this is how it goes in the real world: kill a kid, cut a check.

SEPULVEDAS SETTLE FEDERAL LAWSUIT OVER DEATH

The family of an 11-year-old Modesto boy killed during a SWAT raid has agreed to a $450,000 settlement in a lawsuit against the federal government, a lawyer for the family confirmed Tuesday.

72 posted on 02/27/2002 4:12:57 AM PST by Wolfie
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To: Travis McGee
tremendous read! put me on your ping list for future glimpses please. When will this be available to buy?
73 posted on 02/27/2002 4:28:11 AM PST by fnord
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To: Travis McGee
just finished reading the rest at your site ... can't wait for the hard copy. Good luck.
74 posted on 02/27/2002 5:01:55 AM PST by fnord
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To: Victoria Delsoul
You are as talented as you are lovely and I just love your graphics.
75 posted on 02/27/2002 6:16:50 AM PST by Badray
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To: Travis McGee
Sounds good, it hooked right off.

Should I keep my cell phone turned off now? Should I start sleeping in the daytime and standing the midwatch again?

When can I order the book?

76 posted on 02/27/2002 7:05:31 AM PST by TheErnFormerlyKnownAsBig
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To: Travis McGee
Wow, fantastic! Didn't realize that was yours until I went back and started looking again. I'll be looking forward to the book.

On a side note I've been beating myself up for not staying in for a second enlistment and trying out for Force Recon. Or doing better when I was given the opportunity at 3rd recon bn. Oh well, too soon old, too late smart.

77 posted on 02/27/2002 7:06:11 AM PST by Cap'n Crunch
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To: Travis McGee
Outstanding!

Stay well - Stay safe - Stay armed - Yorktown

78 posted on 02/27/2002 7:09:43 AM PST by harpseal
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To: Wolfie
"The family of an 11-year-old Modesto boy killed during a SWAT raid has agreed to a $450,000 settlement in a lawsuit against the federal government, a lawyer for the family confirmed Tuesday."

This dude had done the same trick before, let his shotgun go off and kill a handcuffed citizen. The citizens deserve to pay for allowing him to remain in law enforcement, IMHO.

If you or I had done this we would be doing time for our carelessness.

79 posted on 02/27/2002 7:14:51 AM PST by Howie
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To: Travis McGee
Excellent writing! Get this thing done and published before its required reading for History 101.....

I can't wait for the finished product. Kindly add me to your ping list.

80 posted on 02/27/2002 7:21:25 AM PST by WALLACE212
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