[supercat]

"conservatives recognize that
their own illumination
is NOT threatened by others' light.">

I thought the format was 5-7-5. Perhaps

Conservatives know
Their own illumination
Is helped by others'.

The anapestic trimeter of the originals' first and third lines is nicer than the 5-syllable meter of the revised version. Not that I'd intended the line as verse to begin with.

[Yosemitest]

My division is
to allow the reader time to absorb the thought,
and isn't intended to be verse.