Well why not? It's no different than any of the ones you recounted. Here it is again in case you missed it:
A long time ago there was a hot soup on the earth. One magical day some of the dirt in the soup became alive! It grew and grew and grew until one day it turned into a fish! Then it turned into a dinosaur! Then it turned into a bird! Then it turned into a monkey! Then it turned into a man! Man was too stupid for a long time to know where he came from. Then one day a great man took a voyage on a ship and came to an island. On the island were many different animals. The man imagined how these animals could have come to be and wrote a book. Others read his book and said "How wonderful this book is! Let us teach it in our schools to our children. And that, my children, is how we came to be.
What makes your story superior to mine?
Evolution is based on the rules of science.