Paul, I usually love your work, but BAND ON THE RUN uses the line "band on the run" 17 times. You need to me more creative. It is lame.
...doug from upland
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RESPONSE FROM MCCARTNEY:
Doug, thanks for the criticism. I know that I used "band on the run" 17 times. So what? If anyone doesn't like that they ---
have their head in their ***...head in their ***
I know it sounds crass...head in their ***
By the way, I read the criticism from the guy who recently joined FR. My nephew is an English teacher. He read No. 23 and said that the guy who wrote it was a real wanker. He recommended that the guy take a refresher course of English 101 at a community college.
Sentence structure: D+
Grammar: D
Punctuation: F
Your friend, Sir Paul
LOL...MUD
Yes, and he also authored 'Number 9'