Brings back memories. Actually a 96 would have been a promotional kiss of death. A 92 should have ended his career!
I'm not sure I'd characterize this as quite a "career-buster" but it sure doesn't have the "this officer walks on water and hold people up on both sides as he does so" quality of most of the one's I've seen.
I noticed in particular he was dinged (i.e. less that perfect) for his shiphandling (which could be considered his primary job as CO of a Boston whaler) on page 1 and for professional knowledge, loyalty, fore, industry, judgement , analytical ability, personal behavior, military bearing and both oral and written self-expression.
If you want to show an officer's improvement, those are not areas you mess with.
Another observation is that the narrative is very flat. The key phrases I don't see are the ones that separate the mediocre from good officers, such as: "I would fight to have X assigned as a battery commander if I were taking the battalion into combat" or "LT X served as a battery commander for the past 6 months with notable valor and efficiency after Capt Y was KIA. He is probably the best battery commander I have seen in 20 years on active duty. Every effort must be made to promote LT X below the zone and to retain him in the Regular Army."