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To: Scenic Sounds; Cathryn Crawford
Very well-written piece, Cathryn. Only one minor writing nit.

Don't say "in closing." Just close the piece with your strongest summation. "In closing" subliminally instructs the reader to stop paying attention - precisely at the one moment you want their full concentration.

In fact, the way you wrote the piece, you could just remove those two words and it would still make perfect sense.

Man, I LOVE talent! Keep up the great work.

Michael

17 posted on 11/07/2003 9:00:55 AM PST by Wright is right! (Never get excited about ANYTHING by the way it looks from behind.)
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To: Wright is right!
Thank you. I'll keep that in mind next week.

I need as many tips as I can get. :-)
19 posted on 11/07/2003 9:07:22 AM PST by Cathryn Crawford (Algunos misterios son tan profundos y maravillosos que deben ser explorados para ser entendido.)
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