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Ward Nineteen
Wallace Freedman
| 8/28/03
| Wallace Freedman
Posted on 08/27/2003 9:09:43 PM PDT by Elisha
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To: Elisha
Saving it for a relaxed read!
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posted on
08/29/2003 10:26:19 PM PDT
by
MEG33
To: MEG33
Be sure and let me know what you think of it- especially if you hate it.
42
posted on
08/29/2003 10:41:54 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Elisha
Will do.I know what I like but am no literary critic!
43
posted on
08/29/2003 10:45:23 PM PDT
by
MEG33
To: MEG33
I'm sure you'll do fine.
44
posted on
08/29/2003 10:48:30 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Jeff Head
BUMP
45
posted on
08/30/2003 11:10:58 PM PDT
by
jokar
(Beware the White European Male Christian theological complex !!)
To: Elisha
My Dear Mr Freedman
It is my sadness and woe
That your story stinks
I must let you know.
Dont give up the day job
And sit there and write
In the morning, afternoon
No, not even at night.
You may be a craftsman
At some other art or trade
Your writing is weak,
And better not displayed
Save the bandwidth for
The issues and the posts
That most of us agree are
Ones that matter the most
Take your little story
With you out the door
And please let us hear
From your pen no more
To: Rhyminsimon
...your story stinks... Come on. You're just saying that to be nice. Tell me what you really think.
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posted on
08/31/2003 9:16:50 AM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Rhyminsimon; Victoria Delsoul; Darksheare; bentfeather; MeeknMing; HiJinx; Argh; Shooter 2.5; ...
Frankly Speaking,
There often come times in human affairs, where we do things or say things, which are not well enough planned or thought out. These words and actions, may be described, as impetuous. Some people are more impetuous than others, and consequently, they often have shoe leather breath. If it werent for frequent brushing and mints, my plight would be the same. I am, too often, one of the more impetuous members of the species.
There is much evidence of my impetuosity, on this thread, from beginning to end. I just want you all to know that I recognize that.
After years of thinking, I might want to write something, the most I had achieved was a few halfhearted starts on outlines and first pages. Then recently, I said, Outline be damned, just write something. So I knocked out Ward Nineteen, not knowing where it was going, just wanting it to end. I spent a couple of days on it, taking out half the flaws and leaving a multitude.
At last, I was able to say, I wrote a story. I wanted to rush it out before others, to get the aforementioned feedback. Unfortunately I posted it in this lonely thread where it will sit and waste into oblivion - not to say that I don't recognize and appreciate, the positve comments from most.
We could perhaps, liken the careers of many authors, to the discovery and development of black powder... Some chinese guy was playing with some ingredients, maybe trying to make a better omelette. He probably haphazrdly threw some ingredients in to the pan, the flames licked the pan, and there was a flash in the pan... He probably messed his pants, and then started wondering if he could duplicate the reaction. Undoubtedly, that first guy ended up losing a finger or two, at the least...
Anyway, to cut the rant, I have a little talent. As a writer, I am still in the stage of infancy. With patience, diligence, and clarity of purpose, I may eventually, write something that I do not have to make apology for. I just wanted to let you know, that I know, that you know, but
Dont cry for me, Argentina,
Wallace Freedman
PS.
For any that might wonder; I make no claims, and have no delusions of mistaking myself for the great and Holy, Elisha. I impetuously chose the name, because I have a great deal of admiration for him, one of the Holiest, and most interesting figures of the Bible. My first choice in this vein, was actually, Elijah.
The story of Elijah gives me a sense of the Might and Power of our God. It gives comfort to ponder that Elijah had actually witnessed so many miracles of God, and, because he was a mere mortal, still came to a point, where he temporarily lost faith in Gods protection, and had a moment of pride, when he assumed that he was the last Holy man left. God still loved him enough to send a chariot, for his trip home.
That gives me great hope, that at the very least, there will be a seat for me, on the last bus.
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posted on
08/31/2003 12:26:04 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Elisha
Frankly Speaking,
bump to the top! Love the gun powder story! LOL
And keep writing no matter what happens, keep writing.
To: bentfeather
Thank you for your kind words, sir. Of course I realized when writing, that it wasn't "gun" powder till later...
50
posted on
08/31/2003 12:49:14 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Elisha
I am female and a poet.
To: bentfeather
I would think that the first words for gun powder, was whatever the Chinese translation is for, "OH S**T!"
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posted on
08/31/2003 1:01:22 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: bentfeather
I was afearin' that. My apologies. Please link your poetry if you choose. I would love to see it.
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posted on
08/31/2003 1:03:09 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Elisha
Click the feather!
To: bentfeather
Thanks for the link! I had already been there glancing over the page. I was awed by the beauty in the images and the words. Talk about talent - Stand up and take a bow! (or curtsy)
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posted on
08/31/2003 1:27:29 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Elisha
Furthermore, I must state for the record, that I am awed by all of the enormously talent represented on FreeRepublic.
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posted on
08/31/2003 1:34:46 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Elisha
oops! -ly
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posted on
08/31/2003 1:36:27 PM PDT
by
Elisha
To: Elisha
I think you are doing just fine, Elisha. Keep up the good work.
58
posted on
08/31/2003 2:14:07 PM PDT
by
Victoria Delsoul
(The opinions I value are the ones from people I respect… the rest are just comic relief)
To: Elisha; bentfeather
Click the Feather, Click the Feather....!!!!!!!!
And know, that you asked for it!
Ms. Feather's poetry is beautiful stuff. I don't always understand it, but I love it anyway!
59
posted on
08/31/2003 3:38:21 PM PDT
by
HiJinx
(The Right person, in the Right place, at the Right time...)
To: Elisha; bentfeather
And keep writing no matter what happens, keep writing. I'm going to echo Ms. Feather's sentiment. You tell a good tale, the possibilities for an expanded novel are there.
I've heard some talk of Tom Clancy's writing style...his manuscripts are tortuous monsters that take no little amount of talent from his editors. At least, that's what I've heard.
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posted on
08/31/2003 3:41:30 PM PDT
by
HiJinx
(The Right person, in the Right place, at the Right time...)
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