To be sure, it's excellent work. IMO to make satire really pop, you need to bury one unbelievable over-the-top detail in the later parts of the story, after all of the lazy readers have tuned out. I would've named the arresting officer something like "J Reno" to see who's still paying attention!
It was a first draft. I had to get it posted quickly before someone else thought of it. ;-)