To: Absolutely Nobama
I decided. Way too wordy, too much needless conversation, and too long.
I suspect you made a good point, but couldn't read the thing. Brevity is the soul of wit; this runs some 2,260 words -- give or take.
The usual newspaper editorial is limited to 600-700 words.
Rewrite!
21 posted on
02/16/2013 4:32:37 PM PST by
BfloGuy
(Money, like chocolate on a hot oven, was melting in the pockets of the people.)
To: BfloGuy
It’s a short story, not an editorial. I don’t usually write fiction. It’s too time consuming.
31 posted on
02/16/2013 4:45:12 PM PST by
Absolutely Nobama
(The Doomsday Clock is at 11:59:00......tick-tock, tick-tock, tick-tock.....)
To: BfloGuy
Rewrite! I'm in the middle of reading "Oliver Twist." Too bad Charles Dickens didn't have a better editor, eh? (/sarc)
I'm sure he must have died poor and obscure. (/dripping sarc)
Really moved by the article. (/approval)
60 posted on
02/16/2013 7:31:50 PM PST by
imardmd1
(An armed society is a polite society -- but dangerous for the fool --)
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