Well, I'm glad the very people who work to protect our freedoms shouldn't have the right to vote in your universe.
But I'm glad your dictator directive on who can vote takes out people with children since they get back, through tax breaks for children, less than those who have none.
They would get the vote when they leave the military. But like any other government employee, they have a vested interest in increasing the amount of money their branch of the government receives. So, that conflict of interest should prevent them from voting.
Actually, the more important issue for me is our tax status here in DC. DC politicians keep asking that DC be made a state, but I tend to take the opposite view. DC should not receive representation, but DC residents should also not be required to pay Federal taxes. Sort of like Puerto Rico- no taxation, no representation.