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Posted on 08/04/2025 11:36:02 PM PDT by Windcatcher
Alliteration: sweet with the scent of spring
“The only kind of writing is rewriting.”
― Ernest Hemingway, A Moveable Feast
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It was Hemingway who wrote the shortest tragic story known to man:
For sale: Baby shoes. Never worn.
I'd write something like this:
Once upon a time, the end.
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I must agree. I rarely use the word myself. See what I did there? Tee-hee!!!
I thought it was perfectly written.
Some of the feedback got me to recognize some words I didn’t need. For example, I condensed this paragraph a bit:
The world faded and a different vision appeared. It showed a middle-aged man and woman sneaking along a moonlit riverbank. Haggard and dirty, they wore ragged clothing that might have been deemed rich, if long ago. They bore overloaded haversacks, but what followed them captured Rhora’s attention. Two ghostly individuals, translucent and indistinct, bore a pallet. On it rested all manner of crates and boxes, far too many for two people to carry. As Rhora watched, the assemblage crept silently and disappeared into the night.
Where did the curtains come from? I’ve visited several castles and not one had curtains in the windows. They had shutters and doors, but no curtains. If there were fabric hanging over the windows, they would be heavy draperies hung over the shutters to prevent cold air from getting in. There were light weight “curtains,” but they were used around the bed to keep bugs out and to disperse light.
I didn’t have curtains in my writing because it seemed out of place. Pernil Manor isn’t a castle, it’s a stone manor, but it is of that era. It’s actually newly built. (It features in the book I published before this one. Lord Arnoar Pernil tried overthrowing King William and failed.)
nicely written and descriptive. i felt overwhelmed with the amount of details and the gods not worshiped but actively seeking apostates...
not knowing the back story makes it difficult to follow the who’s who, but agree, showing is better than telling.
not sure a beckoning is better than a visit... in this case. since she isn’t a follower of the goddess.
ok well castles aren’t in my pea-brain repertoire lol- ‘the bed curtains danced in a frantic mesmerizing fashion while hurricane hillary blew through the village destroying everything in sight’ lol
ogden nash i think it was wrote the world’s shortest poem titled:
“Fleas: Adam Had’em”
Or...
“The bed curtains writhed and twisted as if possessed, thrashing violently in the storm’s breath while Hurricane Hillary tore through the village, ripping homes to shreds and leaving nothing but splinters and screams in her wake.”
lOL- i like that better-
“Then she bounced to New York, threw her hat in the ring for senator and out of nowhere won, much to the dismay of upstate residents.”
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