[rlmorel]

I guess it is okay. I would have put it in parenthesis: "...she was riding in the car with Myeshia Johnson, the widow of Army Sgt. La David T. Johnson (who was killed in Africa along with three other comrades) when she got a call from the president..."

They might frown on that, but that is how I would have written it.

It is like a t-shirt I saw recently:

"Let's eat, Grandma"
"Let's eat Grandma"
COMMAS SAVE LIVES!

[rlmorel]

Eh. I think the parenthesis probably makes it sound like an aside, when it is key to the story.

There are five commas, which seem a bit much to me (though I routinely use a lot as well, but...I don’t write for a living) which chops it up a bit.