There’s nothing wrong with the way you write. It’s called “voice”. Mark Twain used it extensively. Don’t let the grammar martinets bug ya.
Furthermore, any intelligent person who understands English as a language, and its history, should understand that there are no such things as standards, or rules in English. This battle has been fought for 500 years. Their side (the enforcers) have lost every time.
English is one of the only languages on earth without an “academy” that formalizes the rules. And this, is why it has the flexibility that has allowed it to take over the earth. In another 100 years, languages other than english will only be spoken for reasons of culture.
So type as you see fit. Ignore the martinets who distract us from the meaning of the thread.
Thank You.