"A nice cooperative effort" is how I would describe this Foxhole lead story. Your editing does keep things on the main story, the main protagonist, and works OK by me.
Got to get these things down to less than 5,000 words. A challenge, that.
Hey the longer the better, we can always do three parters :-)
Hey Mayor, y'all need a shirt ot hat that says..."I don't suffer from insanity, I enjoy every minute of it"
Regards
alfa6 ;>}