Perhaps this is not his metier, but if he is trying to write a daily news article like this, journalists, long ago in a time when we had good journalists, developed a formula for getting to the point you were trying to make. It was perhaps the economics of newsprint and type-setting, but it served humanity well.
I join you in lamenting the death of the editorial function. I guess you heard that the NYT laid off around 100 copyeditors recently, so not even spelling and elementary grammar will be eyeballed, much less composition and structure.
He does not write a daily news article and he is not a journalist.