That was a very nice story, but it was also very predictable.
I noticed you did not allow the reader to enter inside anyone else’s mind, and see from their perspective, albeit briefly.
Was there an adult present watching this desecration passively from their messy desk?
Good for you, though that you write vs “planning on it someday”.
The greatest satisfaction is when you hold the first copy of your first book in your hand.
It’s a feeling like no other.
Yes these shorts are fun but this one was just 50 or so words to long, and I liked the ‘feel’.
The story is actually an ‘up to dated’ version of three interviews with different Veterans of the ‘Vietnam conflict’. One was a member the 299th a “Koa” in Hawaii National Guard he lost both legs. Another was a medic with two ‘bush’ tours, he saw an incredible amount of carnage, unadulterated war.
The last was based on the stories of a South Vietnamese regular Col. he and his family (9 people) became refugees and from tent city at Camp Pendleton came to stay with us in our house. I was 14/15 at the time.
Terror because of war had become a ‘norm’ for many of those in Vietnam for many years. And as always the children became pawns. Not whining here, just stating a fact.
Oh well to much again. Thank you for the response.