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Posted on 08/07/2007 7:52:15 AM PDT by HairOfTheDog
Welcome to The Hobbit Hole!
Sing hey! for the bath at close of day
That washes the weary mud away!
A loon is he that will not sing:
O! Water Hot is anoble thing!
O! Sweet is the sound of falling rain.
and the brook that leaps from hill to plain;
but better than rain or rippling streams
is Water Hot that smokes and steams.
O! Water cold we may pour at need
down a thirsty throat and be glad indeed;
but better is Beer, if drink we lack,
and Water Hot poured down the back.
O! Water is fair that leaps on high
in a fountain white beneath the sky;
but never did fountain sound so sweet
as splashing Hot Water with my feet!
It still seems awfully circumstantial, but I guess if he had a really lousy defense and a really good prosecution...
Which is probably why I very, very rarely actually *finish* a story. :-\
Trying to remember what I have and what I need... the middle section is vague. Not sure how I get from mid-point disaster to end-point, nor how to set up the mid-point disaster. I have noticed I am very fond of making absolutely everything fall apart halfway through the story. The “And then the world exploded” moment.
If a doctor was going to kill someone, wouldn’t it be easier to prescribe too big a dose or something? Hmm... so what is the framed person’s motivation for killing the victim (I assume that’s part of the circumstantial evidence) and does the real killer care about the victim or was he just trying to get the framee out of the way.
Framer isn’t a doctor — he’s a pharmacist who’s been selling drugs on the side, just in small doses. Also carrying on with a doctor’s wife. She knows about what he’s doing, but he hadn’t seen as a danger until now.
To sum up...when she tries to end things, he decides to off her, and frame her husband. He does this partly to keep her from snitching (and to keep her husband from snitching, in case pharmacist dude gets to her too late and she’s already told her husband), and because he hates the husband on principle. There’s a back story there. Bottom line is that it’s nothing personal, he hates a lot of people.
The husband’s motives from the jury’s standpoint are first of all that they were known to be having some marital problems, and the affair sent him over the edge. In reality, he didn’t find out about that until too late, and isn’t a killer, though it would have broken his heart. And does, after the fact.
And she was pregnant. And not with his child, though no one will actually know who the father is. Except the murderer, of course.
All a good bit darker than most stuff I’ve written, and it’s likely to come across like a little kid trying to write big scary stories, but hey, I gotta try something different once in awhile.
hppf ,ptmomh
I’m awake, really. But I had a new dental crown done this morning and I’m over-novacained.
Huh, it sounds quite interesting! And I’m glad you’ve got a plot, by the way. And some pretty detailed characters it seems.
I have realized that I don’t have very clear characterizations of anyone but my main character... yet again... sigh. And sort of the bad guy but he is a bit one dimensional. And I have to draw out the very complicated relationship diagrams to make sure nobody who is supposed to pair up is actually half-cousins or something.
Relationship diagrams, huh? Where is your story set again?
I’m realizing that — except for an extremely lousy fake journal I did for NaNo a few years back — this is the first semi-realistic fiction I’ve attempted in about a decade. :-\
I have several other main characters I can’t figure out. I get about halfway through the story and get stuck. I’ll do some brainstorming tonight. I’ve been using the typewriter for that...just dumping thoughts onto paper to sort back through later.
Err...no. There will be no llamas, ninja or otherwise, in this particular story.
Half the setting is small town America. The other half is Faeryland. That’s part of what requires relationship diagrams, actually, since some characters in the backstory went to Faeryland and were there for periods of time that did not necessarily correlate with the time elapsed on the America side. And when the bad guy (who is the father of the heroine’s true love) had an affair with the Queen of the Fay (who is the mother of the heroine’s mother) and the heroine’s true love’s sister is carried off by the King of the Fay and has a child with him, who may or may not be supposed to end up with the heroine’s half-sister... well, it gets complicated.
*blink* *blink*
Yeah, OK, I need a diagram. ;-)
Sounds like you got yer little town in deep doo-doo! ;o)
*snort* I have a nightshirt with a design on it that’s a cat in a robe and slippers with a cup of coffee saying “Morning people slapped on sight!”
So do I :)
It’s not as complicated as all that... well, yeah, it is. I still have to figure out how the heroine’s stepfather fits into things. And why the heroine’s mother took certain actions she did.
And whether or not I can rename my heroine or if I’m stuck with “Eleanor”. Ugh. I hate the fact that the first name that I associate with a character usually sticks and I cna’t change it.
Same reason our cats are called Alpha and Beta.
I have to figure out why the main guy (doctor) and a particular girl (who so far seems like a total drip) fall in love later in the story. And how exactly evidence comes up later that clears him. The simplest way would just be to have the murderer get caught doing something else and have him confess, but that seems like cheating.
I rather like Eleanor. I’m stuck with Sonya. Wanna trade?
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